PAPER 1 Question 2
Paper 1 question 2
The following text is a letter written by a man named Richard Branson being written in the first person. ¨I¨ and ¨we¨ is showing how the writer describes himself and who he is talking to in a first person point of view. The writer's target audience is to whom he is writing to which is ¨stranger¨ or someone who seems to want to be starting something new like a business or form of work. This excerpt stays in the format of the letter through the beginning to end and concludes the writing with ¨ Happy regards¨ to end off the writing.
Beginning my analysis about structure the author wrote short paragraphs throughout the entire text and stuck to multiple points in what he was talking about. He started including more and more as he went on and the paragraphs extended as they went to the end of the letter. As the writing goes on the author switches his points from I to we as he had already given the reader all of his advice and the reader has now become the same person as the writer. The point of view the reader spoke in is key to showing the direct dialogue from the writer to the reader.
The form was structured almost in a dialogue with who the author was speaking to. This refers to how it was written in letter form and wasn't really talking about anything factual, it was just the writer giving advice to the audience. The form in a letter is specific to the recipient as they are the person receiving the information from the letter in more of a first person informal speech format.
Furthering my analysis speaking on language the author uses negative phrases in the text to show how the author thinks the reader feels such as ¨stressed scared and sad.¨ to make the reader think about how he is feeling. Then the writer goes to change his word choice to a much brighter tone such as ¨fortunate… and extraordinary ¨ which makes the reader feel how he would feel if he listened to the author's advice as he is trying to portray a happy and pleasant tone to the reader. The author uses very descriptive language speaking on all the thinks he would love to do, making the reader feel almost jealous of how the writer is feeling so the audience can change and follow in the writer's steps.
The author uses repetition in the writing as he states, ¨be healthy'' and ¨be bold¨ he repeats the words ¨Be'' and''It'' which effectively changes the rhythm of the letter and how the atmosphere is viewed by the reader. These two repetitions of words create a sense of emotion in the writing as it gets repetitive which is joyful trying to make the reader feel empowered like he or she can start a movement in what they are trying to do.
Another Figurative language device the author uses is Imagery. ¨the ripple of a wave,¨ is a phrase that helps show imagery which is used to help the reader visualize the text in a personal way. This allows the writer's writing to appeal to pathos based on the emotion the writer is making the reader feel with emotion. Another example of imagery the author uses is ¨It’s sunrise and sunset.¨ which helps the reader experience the writer in a visual perspective not only from the writing but as well as the word choice that the writer uses.
AO1: 4 AO3: 14
ReplyDeleteI thought you did a good job addressing the SOAPS of the letter, which shows understanding of the text. I thought you identified relevant features of the text, such as “informal,” “first person,” and “repetition.” I was personally impressed with your analysis of “imagery.” I thought it was intuitive how you connected it back to “pathos” and related it to how it would impact the reader. I could only find a few spots where additions could be made to further improve your thorough analysis. For instance, I thought your mention of “informal speech” was smart and I would love to see quotations and analysis on this idea. For example, you could cite the contraction “it’s” and the abbreviation “OK” within the phrase “It’s OK.” From here, you could have related it to how the author is trying to be relatable to his audience so that they trust him (ethos). Additionally, when you are discussing words such as “fortunate,” “extraordinary,” and “stressed,” you could refer to these as ‘emotive language.’ Overall, I could tell that you knew what you were talking about, and your response was well planned.
AO1: 3 marks AO3: 12
ReplyDeleteClearly understands the letter. Analysis is complete. Used clear and appropriate language throughout the analysis. Correctly identified form, structure, and language. Overall, good analysis but I wish the “informal speech” was elaborated more upon.
15/25 total points
Hey Troy:
ReplyDeleteAO1: 2/5
You showed a limited understanding of the text. I noticed that you didn't really understand the text. Your understanding of the text could have been shown in a more effective way if instead of you stating, ¨.. My analysis speaking on language the author uses negative phrases,¨ and then you proceeded to give the example ¨stressed scared and sad,¨ In order to make your point stronger, you could have said, ¨Going more in-depth regarding the language of the letter, the author uses phrases such as, ´stressed,’ ´scared´ and ´sad,¨ this creates a sense of comfort between the reader and the writer.¨
I noticed that you had many grammatical and punctuation errors throughout your writing, it almost made it seem like you rushed it. Additionally, you did not meet the word count.
AO3: 8/20
You had a limited analysis. I noticed that you did not really understand the text, therefore, your analysis of it was weak. You had menial awareness of the writer´s stylistic choices. For example, you stated ¨Beginning my analysis about structure the author wrote short paragraphs throughout the entire text and stuck to multiple points in what he is talking about¨ You did not need to say all that. You could have said something along the lines of ¨The structure consisted of short paragraphs. Short paragraphs are used to emphasize information.¨
Total: 10/25